Barriers to Communication - Microfiction
“Stop that,” I roared. I heard another door slam.
“You’re acting like a child,” I yelled down the hallway. Plates rattled.
I finished my makeup and headed for the noises. “Get it togeth-“
The kitchen was empty.
The room went dark.
1/14/2015 05:36:31 am
This is really good, Laura.
1/15/2015 01:19:12 am
Thank you! :-)
1/14/2015 07:00:11 am
That is kind of scary...silence and an empty kitchen wouldn't be a good sign in my opinion!
1/15/2015 01:20:51 am
There's something about an empty kitchen that is always a little spooky...
1/15/2015 01:20:15 am
With a story this length, it's almost more suggestion than statement - so I'm happy I managed to get a scare going!
1/15/2015 01:45:18 am
Well done. It's easy to "hear" the pauses.
1/15/2015 07:30:14 am
1/15/2015 07:30:41 am
I LOVE Hitchcock so I will take this as high praise! Thanks very much!
I failed to comment the first few times I read this. I'm amazed at how much you packed in here, Laura, without resorting to exposition. We have a clear picture of the situation and the immediate feelings present. Your tone is spot on.
1/18/2015 08:40:16 am
Nate: Absolutely! I'd love to hear any additional comments. Thanks very much!
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